Published on February 10, 2007 By DrDonald In Poetry
If she from grace did
fall it was
not dark desire
but fatal flaw
that brought her
to our midst.

Oblivion and Passion Lost
are we.
Within this putrid place
for all to see
our shaded husks,
forgotten schemes,
exploited and abandoned
teens and tots.

Now, claustrophobic dreams
Has she of
getting, using
misery
getting, using
endlessly, each time

sweet vein and blush
of blood envelopes
like a flood
of
death
until

last
breath.

Comments
on Feb 11, 2007
Wow.  I really, really liked this.  It struck a chord with me.
on Feb 11, 2007
I pictured a shooting gallery with mothers' daughters for sale, but with you weighing in, I see the setting could equally well be as epitaph for a DOA in any ER. Thanks.
on Feb 12, 2007
of
getting, using
misery
getting, using
endlessly


This is powerful stuff... Simple, elegant and very, very powerful.
on Feb 12, 2007
* thank you maso -- very kind -- my better stuff seems to write itself
* lw & shovelheat had challenged me to explore my void, I blame them

Good idea for a writer's challenge by the way... I know what I would write about ...just don't know if I could deal with the feelings ...we'll see.
on Feb 12, 2007
my better stuff seems to write itself


As does mine.

we'll see


I'll be looking for it...
on Feb 12, 2007
If she from grace did
fall it was
not dark desire
but fatal flaw
that brought her
to our midst.


wow. Simply...

Wow...
on Feb 13, 2007
Thanks shovel (Joe). Means a lot to me.

A lot of addicts and alkys will share that being cool or being high was not as big a motive for their addiction as wanting to feel normal or just being a born addict. The biggest evidence of this is with the dry addict or drunk. Like they say in AA, "take alcohol away from an asshole, you still got an asshole." This is why these groups try to focus on personal change, so people can live "in their own skins".
on Feb 14, 2007
Well done, you have a great facility with imagery and language. - Moskowitz
on Feb 14, 2007
Thanks Buddah. I have much to learn. Through your poetry, you both teach and delight.